This week I have been using a range of language features to help make my writing more descriptive. Some language features we have been talking about are similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia.

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Today when I went to new lynn mall I can hear people talking,babies crying and car driving. It was my best day ever. This was happening in the restaurant when i was at the restaurant I taste the chocolate ice cream it was delicious and ate some pizza .I could see the toys shop and when I went in the toy shop i touch this witch face when I touch it it made a noise and she said i’m a witch i like to play with kids.

By Hadiya